What I am going to show you today, Is my WRITING! Our teacher gave us a document to write on. We have been writing about narratives and most people did scary stories. I like my story so fast and when I had it shared to the whole class no one said any thing bad about it but I had 1 small mistake.
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Good day Tiana, It's Venice. I like how you added a lot of detail in your paragraphs. I was quite shocked when you wrote that the father had abandoned the child, it was quite sad. I also like the way you ended your story. It is a great hook. I feel like I want to continue on reading the story. That will be all from me. Have a great and wonderful weekend.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Tiana.
ReplyDeleteI am looking forward to reading more.Your words dragged me in and gave me a picture in my head.You've used some great WOW words and I can't wait to find out what is on the other side of the tunnel.